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A few days had passed since the destruction of Eggman's Ultimate Badnik and things were once again settling down for Team Sonic. Routine began to set in again and the friends had resumed the normal activities with which they were usually involved in. One obvious difference remained however, and that was the presence of Jaran Kai. Undeniably their trust of him was still shaky, but everyone had begun to adapt to the presence of their new human companion. When Team Sonic participated in group activities Kai would often join them, although he was still a bit standoffish. While the construction of his house had been delayed by their ordeal with Eggman, it continued to progressed slowly forward. Now that Kai was no longer using the construction as a distraction he had become a great deal less picky with the details of the building. He and Tails would usually work through half-a-day, and then he would allow Tails to return home to meet Cosmo for their daily conjugation.

As for the young couple, things were going more smoothly between them now that Eggman was temporarily at bay. True, the Doctor would always return to fulfill his role as the antagonist to the Freedom Fighters, which is why Tails took every opportunity to be with Cosmo on normal days. It could be said that the trials they had been through had drawn the two closer together, and it showed in their actions. Both had taken to holding each other's hands in public and would exchange a kiss openly now and then. Privately they were a bit more lenient, and passionate kisses and hugs were not uncommon between them. More than once had Sonic visited Tails' house and found the two sprawled out on the sofa, having fallen asleep in each other's arms while cuddling. This often resulted in endless teasing from the others, but this bothered nether Tails or Cosmo. They simply took joy in every moment that they could spend together.

On this particular evening Cosmo had elected to stay late at Tails' house, which Vanilla had agreed to on the condition that Tails escort her home afterward. Tails had agreed and the two were now preparing to spend the evening having a movie marathon. Cosmo sat on the couch as she waited for Tails to return from the kitchen, humming a chipper tune to herself as she did so. Soon Tails came hobbling out of the kitchen toting an unnecessarily large bowl of popcorn in one hand, while carrying two cups in the other hand. Cosmo attempted to stifle a giggle as she watched Tails comically waddle toward the couch before finally getting up herself to aid him.

"I don't think you needed that much popcorn, sweetie," Cosmo laughed, "Nether of us will ever be able to eat all of that!"

"I guess I overestimated how much we would need," Tails said, "I thought that since we would be here a few hours we would eat more, but..."

"You're a silly fox," Cosmo giggled, then reached out and took the two cups from his left hand, "I'll take care of these."

"Thanks, sweetie," Tails replied, letting out a brief chuckle at his own words. Both he and Cosmo had begun using "sweetie" and other such terms of endearment more often. Tails realized that it had begun shortly after he had accidentally used one of these terms when they had rescued Cosmo from Eggman, but nether seemed uncomfortable with the idea. Tails then set the large bowl on the coffee table in front of the couch, sitting himself down and adjusting himself so as to be more comfortable. Cosmo placed the two cups on the coffee table also, then sat next to Tails and scooted closer to him.

"This is nice," Cosmo mused, leaning her head against Tails' shoulder while he pressed the play button on the remote to start the movie, "Thank you for letting me come over today, Tails."

"You don't have thank me, Cosmo!" Tails laughed, wrapping his namesakes around her waist and placing an arm over her shoulder drawing her closer, "You know I always love having you around!"

"Still, you have been so good to me," Cosmo continued, snuggling into his warm fur and sighing contentedly, "No one has ever made me as happy as you do. I only hope I can find a way to make you just as happy, too."

"You already do," Tails said to Cosmo with an affectionate smile to which she blushed slightly, but smiled in return.

It was quiet for a moment as the two stared at the screen enjoying the movie that was being played, but not nearly as much as they were enjoying each other's company. Tails could not help but fantasize about his future with Cosmo, wondering where their romance would lead them. He hoped it would last forever, and had no reason to doubt that it would, for their love and devotion had survived death. Why should the test of time make a difference? Still, he wondered what measures that he could take to ensure that would happen. He hoped that somehow he could find a way to be there for Cosmo every moment, day or night, in case she needed him. More than that, he wished to be with her even when he was not necessarily needed, but rather desired. He wished that she could live with him. "How wonderful would that be?" He thought.

"Well, why couldn't she?" Tails began to wonder to himself. Even though he was only eight years old Tails made enough income to maintain his home, and was perfectly capable of supporting two people with the money he made selling his inventions and the occasional fan donations he received. He was a capable cook and could care for others when they were sick, and he and Cosmo were openly and deeply in love, so what reason was there not to?

Even with his youthful mindset however Tails was fully aware that it was never that simple. The social implications of two young people living together in a house by themselves would raise suspicions from other Mobians. The ridicule Cosmo was bound to face for being non-terrestrial would only be compounded if they knew she was living with him. True, he would experience ridicule himself, but he was willing to bear through it. Aside from that, what would Cosmo think of him if he were to ask? What if she thought he was being too forward and left him? He would rather continue with the status quo than lose Cosmo altogether. He would be lying though if he said that her living with him was not something he wanted greatly.

"Tails, are you all right?" Cosmo suddenly asked him, causing him to snap to attention, "You seem frustrated. Is something bothering you?"

"Err... no, I'm fine," Tails said defensively, "Just... thinking."

"About what?" Cosmo asked curiously.

"Ah... nothing," Tails said hesitantly, "it's not important."

"You're not... afraid to tell me, are you?" Cosmo said seeming worried, "Because if you are-"

"I'm fine, Cosmo. Really," Tails said, "nothing's wrong."

"Oh... okay then," Cosmo replied seeming hurt.

There was a long moment of silence between the two as they stared at the television in front of them. Tails shifted in his seat uncomfortably while Cosmo continued to stare forward with a hurt expression on her face. Tails suddenly let out a long sigh, standing up from the sofa and began walking toward the kitchen.

"Where are you going?" Cosmo asked worriedly, "Have I upset you, Miles?"

"No, I just need to... get something. I'll be right back," Tails replied before entering the kitchen and closing the door behind him.

"Okay, do you want me to pause-" Cosmo ceased speaking when she realized that Tails had already left the room. She then lowered her head with sadness reflecting in her eyes.

Upon entering the kitchen Tails leaned against the door and closed his eyes, breathing a frustrated sigh as he did. "I want to ask her," Tails whispered to himself quietly, "but I don't know if I should. What am I supposed to do?"

"What is it that you think you should do?" A voice suddenly said, causing Tails to jump in surprise. Quickly turning his head to the left Tails spotted Jaran Kai standing in his kitchen, crossing his arms and staring at him inquisitively.

"Kai, what are you doing here?" Tails asked the robed human, "How'd you get in?"

Kai pointed to his left and Tails followed his finger until his eyes fell upon the window above his kitchen sink, which he noticed was open. Tails gave a brief grunt of frustration upon seeing this.

"Don't do that," Tails said in a dull voice, "What are you doing here?"

"I sensed you were troubled, so I came," Kai answered, "What's on your mind, my friend?"

"It's... nothing," Tails evaded, shuffling to the other side of the kitchen anxiously.

"Your thoughts betray you," Kai said closing his eyes, "I already know what you're thinking about. You might as well tell me."

"Isn't it kind of rude to read my mind like that?" Tails asked uncomfortably, "What if there's something I don't want you to know?"

"Then your mind would shut me out, and I would respect your privacy," Kai said calmly, "but this is obviously something that you greatly want to be known. I wouldn't be able to see it if that weren't so."

Tails gave a loud sigh, pacing the kitchen in frustration as he tried to decide how to best explain his feelings. He knew that Kai was aware of his desires, so it really didn't matter how he worded it. He finally decided to say whatever came into his mind first.

"I... want Cosmo to move in with me," Tails stated plainly.

Kai responded by arching his eyebrow at the fox, staring at him with an intrigued expression. "Why?" He asked simply.

"Because," Tails began, "I love her. I want her around all the time. I want to take care of her."

"That is a big commitment, Tails," Kai pointed out, "Besides, you do that anyways. You protect her, you're with her most of the time, and you care for her when she is around. Why is it so important that she live here? What would change?"

"Because I want to be with her ALL the time," Tails continued, "not just during the day. I want her here so I can be near her WHENEVER she needs me, day or night. I want to be the one who supports her. I want to take care of even her smallest needs."

"Another mouth to feed," Kai stated dryly, "why do you want that?"

"Because," Tails said growing frustrated, "I want her needs to become my responsibility. Because I know that no one can take care of her like I can. Because I want to be with her when she doesn't need me. I want her to know that I am always there, day or night, for even the smallest things. I love her, and I want her here with me... forever."

There was silence between the Mobian and the human as Kai stared at the fox blankly. Tails began to grow nervous, fearing that he might have incurred Kai's wrath somehow. His fear became confusion however as a wide grin began to spread across Kai's face and a light chuckle escaped his lips.

"That, my friend, was the right answer," Kai said in an amused tone, "It is clear to me that you both deserve the companionship you seek, so why not ask her?"

"Because," Tails said beginning to pace again, "I'm not sure how she'll react. I don't want her to think I'm being pushy or forward or anything, and what if she says no?"

"What if she does?" Kai inquired, "It simply means she isn't ready. That is not to say she will never be ready. I can promise you though that even if she does refuse, it will not be the end of your relationship. Your commitment survived death, so a simple request could not possibly end it now."

"But... she lives with Miss Vanilla," Tails continued to hesitate, "What will she think if I ask Cosmo to live with me? She might get mad."

"She will not," Kai replied.

"How do you know?" Tails asked.

"Because we have already spoken of it,"  Kai said, much to Tails surprise.

"Wait, you talked to her about it already!?" Tails said in shock, "B-but... how did you know that's what I wanted?"

"I had a hunch," Kai said, "and Vanilla was accepting of the idea. She also told me that if you do ask her, that she conveys her blessing."

"But what if-"

"Tails, you can think of a thousand reasons not to do something," Kai spoke, "but you only need one reason to get what you desire. Ask her, you might be surprised as to what she says."

Tails fell silent once again, considering his options and what might come of him asking Cosmo to move in with him. He then came to realize that Kai was right, the worst she could possibly do is say no, and he really had nothing to lose by asking her. He finally came to a decision as he looked up at Kai and gave him an uncertain smile.

"Okay... I guess there's no reason not to."

"Good boy," Kai said, walking toward the open window he had apparently entered from then turned his head to look over his shoulder, "And Tails, when she does say yes, don't worry about embarrassing yourself in front of her. You have a right to be enthusiastic."

"But, how do you know she'll-"

"Shh," Kai hushed, silencing the fox. Tails stared at the odd man waiting for him to continue as a smile formed over Kai's face. "Let's just say I have another hunch and leave it at that."

Tails could not help but smile at the human, grateful for his encouragement. "Thanks, Kai," Tails said to the man.

"Don't mention it," Kai said as he began to climb his way out the window, "Really, don't. Oh, and Tails?"

"Yes?" Tails replied cocking his head to the side in curiosity.

"It's Jaran," Kai said with a smile, "just call me Jaran."

Tails said nothing, replying only with a nod of his head and a friendly smile. He then turned around to face the living room door and walked toward it, stopping to steal one last glance over his shoulder at where Kai had previously been. Seeing that he had left and had been courteous enough to close the window behind him, Tails shook his head and once again entered the living room where Cosmo was waiting for him.

Upon entering the living room Tails noticed that Cosmo had stopped the movie and was leaning her head against the armrest of the couch, looking very distraught. Noticing that Tails had re-entered the room, Cosmo quickly sat up and looked at him, forcing a smile upon her face as he sat back down.

"Cosmo, are you okay?" Tails asked, knowing full well when something was bothering his girlfriend, "Is something bothering you?"

"Well... not really," Cosmo evaded, "It's just... I don't want you to be upset with me."

"Huh?" Tails said, seeming confused, "What do you mean?"

"You just seem very distant tonight," Cosmo replied, "Whatever I have done, please tell me so I can fix it."

"What? No!" Tails said quickly, not wanting Cosmo to think she had done something wrong, "I'm not mad at you! You haven't done anything! What made you think that?"

"It just seemed like something was bothering you and you didn't want to tell me," Cosmo replied, "I thought it must have been something I did."

"Of course not, Cosmo!" Tails said giving her a pleasant smile, "I just have a lot on my mind right now, that's all."

"You know you can tell me," Cosmo said, reaching over and resting her hand on top of Tails' hand, "If there's something bothering you, I want to help."

Tails hesitated, knowing what he was about to ask Cosmo and fearing the response he would receive. He recalled what Kai had told him however and realized that if it were ever to come to pass, he would eventually have to take that leap. Tails then took a deep breath and let it out slowly, preparing to ask what he had wanted to for a long time.

"Cosmo," Tails began, "you know that... that I love you, right?"

"Well of course I do!" Cosmo giggled, "You've been very open about that lately. Why?"

"Well, I- you know you can trust me, right?" Tails asked nervously, "I'll always be there for you. You know that don't you?"

"Tails, where is this going?" Cosmo asked seeming to become a bit nervous.

Tails gave a loud sigh, folding his hands in his lap nervously as he began to twiddle his thumbs. After a brief pause he continued to speak. "Cosmo," he began, "ever since you came back I've been wanting to become closer to you. I... I wanted to become more than friends. Now that we are, it's like I don't want to be away from you. I... I want to be able to take care of you."

"But you do take care of me, Tails," Cosmo said, "All of the times you have saved me I-"

"No, I don't mean like that," Tails interrupted, "I mean I want to take care of you all the time, even when nothing is going on. I want to be there to make sure you are comfortable and happy. I want to be there to wish you off to sleep at night."

"Tails, what are you saying?" Cosmo asked, now listening intently.

"Cosmo, what I want to ask," Tails said, beginning to choke up, "is... will you... would you like to come and live with me?"

There was silence in the room as Tails waited for a response from his love. When nothing was said, Tails chanced to look up at Cosmo, who was staring at him with her mouth agape while simultaneously blushing. Tails quickly looked down in his lap, blushing himself as he spoke with nervousness in his voice.

"I-I'm sorry," he said in a low voice, "I shouldn't have asked. It was a stupid idea. I should have-"

Tails was cut off when Cosmo suddenly leapt at him from across the sofa, tackling him and causing him to fall onto the cushions on his back. Cosmo wrapped her arms around Tails in a crushing hug as she whispered into his ear.

"I hoped you would ask that since the day I came back," Cosmo said softly, "Thank you so much, Tails!"

"Wait," Tails said, leaning up and looking into Cosmo's eyes, "You did? I never thought- so does that mean?"

"Yes, Tails, I would love to come and live with you," Cosmo answered, smiling lovingly at the two tailed fox.

"Really?" Tails said, seeming surprised at the answer he had just received, "That's great! I guess we'll tell Miss Vanilla tomorrow. I can help you move your stuff if you want."

"That would be wonderful," Cosmo said stroking Tails' whiskers lovingly, "Thank you so much Tails. You... you are amazing."

"I love you, Cosmo," Tails said, gently running his hands up and down her back, "and I always will."

"I love you too, Tails," Cosmo replied hugging Tails closer.

Slowly the two brought their heads together, their lips meeting once again in their traditional dance of affection. As the two continued to kiss both realized that no matter what trials they faced and no matter how much they lost, they would always have each other, and that would be their greatest ally through what was to come...

Meanwhile, far out in the depths of space, far from Mobius, a scene of stellar peace prevailed as the stars of the area twinkled happily. A bright, rolling nebula could be seen in the distance, while a fiery red comet drifted lazily through space. An undisturbed area of the cosmos where beauty was commonplace, and a silent peace reigned supreme.

The peace was suddenly broken however, when a gap suddenly formed between the stars. The gap began to grow, starting as only a pinprick of black and expanding until a gigantic, swirling vortex was opened in the fabric of space. Lightning arched within the massive pit in space revealing more of the endless abyss with each burst. The swirling black stood violently drawing in loose matter that rested anywhere in the general vicinity, tearing at the space around it like a hurricane.

As if from Hell itself, a black mass began to emerge from the abyss, crawling out from between the stars like a sick cancer of the universe. A gargantuan pointed thing with a cragged and broken surface, as though pulled from a junkyard of damned starships. The life and beauty that the scenery once held was suddenly snuffed out, seeming to pale at the presence of this dark craft. The vortex closed behind it, leaving only this monstrous ship hovering silently in space.

Within the dark mass, past the fragmented hull and halls exposed to the vacuum of space, a massive bridge stood; its ceiling and forward area dominated entirely by one massive viewport. A large platform rested above a row of deep pits with control stations on either side of it. Within the control pits were several zombie-like humanoids working at their stations with tired, empty stares. At the end of the platform was a large observation area, looking out the massive window and giving a grandiose display of the space outside. Standing upon that platform, was a dark humanoid staring out into space.

This humanoid did not fit the description of normal, however. The creature was garbed in midnight black robes with obsidian armor covering its breast. A hood shrouded the head of the creature, showing nothing of its face. Even the simplest of features were concealed, as if there was only an infinite blackness underneath the hood. The only thing that could be seen under the hood were two bright, white eyes, which contained no pupils and seemed to be suspended in the black void that rested under the garb. Shadows seemed to curl and writhe at the feet of the entity and any light that the room held seemed to be sucked from the air around it. Most disturbing however were the sensations that the creature gave off. It was as if the entity radiated all emotions that were negative. Something about the being simply seemed utterly and totally wrong.

As the black entity stood on the platform, a zombified humanoid approached it from behind, stopping and addressing the creature with a voice full of absolute and total fear.

"We are receiving a transmission," said the sickly looking human.

"Source?" Asked the entity, its voice sounding vile in every possible way.

"The comet..." replied the human, "it originates from within the comet."

"Open a connection," the black entity said, "Let me hear it."

Static hissed from an unidentified source on the bridge of the ship, as a barely audible voice became apparent. Slowly the voice resolved itself and began to address whomever would hear it.

"We are the Black Arms," a deep voice said, "lower your shields and prepare to be boarded by our soldiers. You will serve us now."

The dark entities eyes seemed to flicker, showing amusement as it stepped forward. The creature then replied in a voice so chilling that it would freeze one's blood.

"Black Arms," the entity spoke officially, "before I comply to your terms I must ask, to whom am I speaking?"

"I am your new overlord, Black Doom," replied the deep voice, "You will surrender your ship to the Black Arms and we will find a purpose for all life on your vessel."

"Well, Black Doom of the Black Arms," the entity said in a subtly mocking tone, "as much as your confidence amuses me, I'm afraid you have our roles quite reversed."

"What!?" Growled Black Doom, "You are outmatched in every way! I have hundreds of ships at my disposal and you have one! Surrender or you will be annihilated!"

"I will be forced to decline," the entity responded, "You will, however, surrender your comet to me. Do so and there will be minimal loss of life."

"You would dare defy the Black Arms!?" Roared Black Doom angrily, "You will die for your insolence! Who are you to deny us!?"

"I..." hissed the entity in a sickeningly pleased voice, "am Xemus..."
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Again, reviewing as a whole.

This one had a much different tone than the previous story, with more a few more "sunshine and bunnies" moments than "dark shadows and despair" ones. It had LOTS of romance in it; even some slight romantic tension between Sonic and Amy, from what I interpret. It was nice to see Eggman as the big bad villain again. I hope he shows up in the next few books, still being the devious villain he always has been.

Now I want to talk about this Jaran Kai. I am almost convinced he is a Jedi, or at least has ties to the order; his powers, hints in the backstory...and the lightsaber all point to Jedi origins. Now the next question I am sure will be answered in the next installments; How did he get to be a guardian of the omniverse, leaving his own timeline in the process? I find him intriguing to say the least, as most Jedi I've seen are warm, compassionate, wise, and easy to talk to. But his cold, calculating, distant demeanor just seems...offset of the typical Jedi to me. If not for that, I think I would have really disliked this character, but he's interesting enough for me to overlook is status of being "over-powerd". I don't have a problem with him being powerful and being an ally, nor do I have a serious problem with a Jedi being in the Sonic Universe, as I am can be a sucker for crossovers. But I have yet to see him in a vulnerable moment. I personally would have preferred it if Eggman did legitimately capture him and used him as the battery for the machine. Then the heroes could have pulled some epic win out of their hats and rescued a Jedi from trouble, showing that they are not so helpless. The fact that he freed himself and then restored the chaos emeralds was a little strange and tough to deal with, but I suppose they had to be restored somehow without sacrificing Cosmo...again. And at least you're keeping some element of mystery around Kai. If he just came out and blatantly said that he was a Jedi, spilling the secrets of his order, his universe, and the Force would have shut me off of this pretty quick. But that fact he doesn't adds to his character, instead of him being just a Mary Sue ( I hate that term).

Story and Emotion: Honestly...this would have been TONS better if there was no dimension crossing with Star Wars, but not to say it was bad. This was still very enjoyable to read, and among the stories that involve Sonic and Star Wars, this is the only one thus far that is intelligently written, opening up the idea of MANY different dimensions, timelines, and worlds out there, giving this a sort of bigness. The prologue itself gave a sense of perspective, giving Jaran Kai a purpose to be there in the first place, although I fail to see what makes Tails and Cosmo so important (again, I'll probably find out later). The conflict in this was overall AWESOME. Eggman rolling out the big guns gave Jaran a reason to be a badass and show off his powers. And now that he has some of this technology, who knows what he could do with it. Your ending just hit off my interest in the next story though. Black Arms being nonchalantly discounted as a non-threat to this entity is nothing small. Black Doom is all business. I'm not going to say this story feels complete, as the ending blatantly says "We aren't done yet, folks," and the fact that I know that there are two more books ;)

Characters: I already pretty much touched on Jaran, but I suppose there's one more thing. When I look at a new character, I ask "Does this character have a legitimate purpose to be there?" And despite the gripes I may have with him, my answer is "yes." His service to a higher power and new purpose make him an important part of the story. At least you didn't lose sight of that. And as with this Jedi/Sonic crossover (as I see it), these things should be done smartly...and you did do that. Instead of just dropping a Jedi in this for the hell of it, you seem to have thought it through and gave a decent enough reason for his existance. And...Jedi are powerful, who's to say they can't see or even travel beyond their own worlds. Soul Calibur 4 did that, so why not here? ^_^ As for the others, Vanilla still proves to be that caring individual, but still be strong when she has to be. The others were still true to their origins, personalities, and reactions. There was a little less character evolution here than the last one, but this is more of a story of Tails starting over and picking up where he left off with Cosmo, and not a journey of self-discovery. Now the new guy on the block, Xemus. I am still fixated on Star Wars, so I'm drawing a parallel between him and a Darth Nihilus from Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic 2. He's an entity who is more of a would in the force, draining life wherever he goes, surrounded by his crew, who seem more dead than alive. I'm interested to see how this plays out.

Setting and Pacing: Again, nice mentioning of other Sonic places, like Emerald Coast. You still don't fail in explaining the world and emotions conveyed in those places as well. I could feel my heart swell with joy at those close moments between Tails and Cosmo, and feel very angry with Kai when he appeared to have betrayed his charges. Most of it was well paced, although I did wish at times that Tails and Cosmo would stop being so self-conscious. However, it was fitting given the circumstances of their reunion, so I'm giving props for that bit of writing, not hating on it. That bit where she jumps into his arms after he asks her to live with her was a nice ending to all that they've been through. Most everything resolved smoothly, Although I felt like that final battle was a little rushed. Kai got free a little to fast in my opinion.

To finish things off, I thought this was a lot more action packed than the last one, mostly involving Jaran Kai. This story set the premise for what is to become a lot bigger in scope (and probably danger) in the next books. Now I can recommend this to Star Wars and Jedi fans as well, as this character, Jaran Kai, just might click well with them. Despite my critical view of this story, I would still recommend it to anyone who is looking for a good read and a rocking good time; filled with good character interaction, drama, romance, and action.
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Bombchu-Link Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay, so i finished reading the second book now, and I must say, it wasn't as good as the first one, but I did especially like what vanilla had to say about Cosmo and Tails becoming adults to Amy on the beach. 

Also I liked a lot what Kai said to Sonic and Tails about loving compared to infatuation. 

One think I didn't quite understand, was shadow's character, it seemed that he was overly rude (especially toward vanilla) but more tolerant in doing things with others around, the last thing I would expect is for him to sit in a car for 3 hours and sulk at the beach, but I guess that's just me. :p

The only other thing I found confusing, was why Tails would want to just live (in the same house) with Cosmo. Unless that is, Mobians never invented something called "marriage".

Oh and black doom, yay, does this mean we get a Shadow the Hedgehog done the right way? =P
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
But you did like it?
Bombchu-Link Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh yes, of course. ^^
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I fear my work degenerates in quality the more it progresses. Perhaps that is merely my self-critical nature. While my writing style has improved, from a storyteller's perspective Eternal Angel will always be my crowning achievement.

There are many people in love who take the time to live together before marrying, as a way to grow accustomed to each other before marriage. I did it.

Enjoy the third book.
Bombchu-Link Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It can, but not necessarily because of the writer, it's just that you have to have some idle time to catch up on important things that keep the story flowing smoothly. It took 6 chapters just to set the scene in this book. (arguably 12, if you want to include the beach trip). On the other hand, you had all of Season 3 as directly applicable back-story for Eternal Angel.

I guess, it just seems to me (especially how open they were about their affection toward another) that tails would just sweep her off her feet right there.

I will, I'm certain of it. ;)
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
They are still children. Just because they've declared themselves an item doesn't mean there isn't lingering shyness.
Bombchu-Link Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Well, they sort of aren't children anymore. Tails is 11 (possibly 12) years of age.

He was 8 in season 1, one year passed between episode 1-27. and season 2 was another 6 months, and then the break between 52 and 53 was another 6 months. According to Eternal Angel, they fought the Metarex for 6 months, and then Eternal Angel lasted almost another year after that. The Dark guardian took about 1-3 months, (cause in Eternal angel was ended in the spring after the funeral), while the visited the beach well into summer, plus however long afterwords Cosmo was captured.

8(.0-9?)* + 1 + 0.5 + 0.5 + 0.5 + 1 + 0.25 = 11.75 + .(0-9)* = 11.75 - 12.65

Though, Cosmo is 8 in season 3, so she would only be about 10-11

*we don't know if he/she had his/her 8th birthday last week, or 11 months ago

Well, after doing the math, I guess they are just kids. (though Amy at 12 is still asking sonic to marry her...)

"Just because they've declared themselves an item..."

An item? What exactly do you mean?
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, the timeline is a bit wonky I admit. It is stated that Tails and Cosmo are roughly the same age in the series. It is also said that Cosmo is roughly 8 years old at the time of meeting Team Sonic, which puts it in contradiction with series one. In my series I work off the assumption that Tails is still 8 at the time of Cosmo's death. I intend to re-write my story eventually and plot out the timeline for more clarity, but until then I just say their universe suffers from "temporal strain". In other words, their universe's timeline experiences rapid acceleration or deceleration at different periods (possibly a temporal effect of the Chaos Emeralds). It's a stretch, but until refinement that's the excuse I give.

An Item = Boyfriend/Girlfriend
Bombchu-Link Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah okay then.

thanks for answering all my questions. ;)
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I welcome any you have. Enjoy book 3.
hightemplarr Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Great job both dark guardian and eternal angel are masterpieces
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hah! I'd hardly say that, but I'm glad you think highly of them.
Lionwar1996 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
As soon as I saw "Xemus" I thought of Kingdom Hearts but the villien was named "Xemnas" unless he's somehow related but I don't think your doing a crossover.

Great story, I can't wait for book 3...... Unless its already out? Meh, I'll check as soon as I post the comment. So keep up the great work. :)
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, book three is out. I'm working on book 4 now. And no, Xemas and Xemnas have no relationship. I've actually never played Kingdom Hearts.
CharlesBulbmin Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013   Traditional Artist
Well Cosmo's living with Tails now, which, of course, was already expected. As a matter of fact I just now remembered how Tails seemed a little disapointed at the beginning of the story when it was decided that she was going to live with Vanilla. I like that in stories, how the tiniest details foreshadow what'll happen in the future. Now there's going to be a whole lot more opportunities for romance scenes between the two lovebirds. Ha ha!:lol:

I knew it! The mysterious figure (now known as Xemus) is going to start the plot for book 3! Speaking of which, I can't wait to get started after I fave this.
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Anxious to hear from you on that; and thank you very much!
CharlesBulbmin Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013   Traditional Artist
You're welcome, my friend.
Powershade117 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for accepting my critique. Honestly, after reading this, I was worried that some of my words would be misinterpreted as me hating it. Tis not the case.

Although, I'd like to share my two favorite moments in this book:
1) When Shadoew gets suspicious of Cosmo and proceeds to slice her hand with a piece of broken glass. It was brutal, but a powerful moment as well. Shadow was wrong to do so, but he did it with good intentions.
2) The "breath kiss" as I call it in the decompression chamber. I laughed so hard at that part; so awkward, yet cute at the same time (as cute as a life-threatening situation can be). Oddly enough, I had a nearly identical idea that I wanted to do in a Sonic story I'm writing that will be animated into an online show by a friend of mine. ^_^ Hate to sound like a copycat here, but...idk :)
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Not at all. You are one of my more analytical readers, and the only one who has critiqued me in a long time. For that I thank you.
Powershade117 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
and I just realized I had two major typos in my critique as well. Oops.

When I mentioned Darth Nihilus, I meant to say "wound in the Force," not "would in the force."

And then I wrote this passage. "That bit where she jumps into his arms after he asks her to live with HER was a nice ending to all that they've been through." That all-caps "HER" should have been "him."

FAIL ^_^
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I knew what you meant. XD It happens man.
IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I loved it! It seems I cannot access your next story from your main page though. Could you by any chance fix this problem somehow please?
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I only add completed books to my main page. Sorry. >.<
IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's fine, I found it.
XGBlue Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You should have let this die with Cosmo saying yes. But no, you attempt to task yourself with an even greater villain to defeat... assuming you do. Pity, with all your magnificence I thought you were smart enough to know when to stop.
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had actually always intended to have Xemus come into the fray. I have an entire saga that has yet to be written, and these two books were literally just the prologue to that. I'm sorry I have disappointed you, but my other readers seem to like my next book just as well. Therefore I must please the masses.
XGBlue Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
FicDoctorMD Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
But your analysis is most valuable.
XGBlue Featured By Owner May 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome, my formidable friend.
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